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Friday, October 22, 2010

Next poem - in the rough

Yikes! I didn't have time to get this revised. My hubby's home from a long trip, and we've got friends visiting for the weekend.

But I didn't want to miss posting. This is such a great way to write a book. Who knew? I love getting immediate feedback, and the pressure to create every day is really good. Thanks everybody for all your thoughtful comments. I'll have the longest acknowledgement page in history for this book.

So here's Leesie's next poem totally in the rough. I'm guessing this will be the first part of the next chapter. I'm hoping to post all of chapter four on Monday.





11 comments:

  1. Oh my...that was so sad...poor Leesie, poor Leesie's hair, and poor Michael who LOVED Leesie's hair...

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  2. Oh...poor Leese!! Ohh...she must feel terrible. Michael loved Leesie's hair! Awww that's so sad. But she couldn't deal with it. Michael was devestated. Great poem.

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  3. Hey girls, I'll let you in on a big fat writerly secret. Your job as a writer is to make things worse and worse and worse. Writers say you have to chase your characters up a tree and THROW ROCKS. Leesie's hair was a big rock. Thanks for deciphering my rough drafts. Have a good weekend~

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  4. This is SAD. I think Leesie shaving her hair is too much. I had a friend who have a similar accident years ago and she cut it because of the part that was shaved on the hospital. When I asked her she told me that she will rater cut it short than not having hair at all. I thik in this part of the story a happy medium will be much better. They have been trough a lot already, so take it easy on her on this, PLEASE. If Michael could help her keeping her hair it will be much better and loving.

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  5. Oh man, Leesie's lovely hair. There's so much angst and emotion here, I love it, love it, love it.

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  6. So, Michelle, it's my job to convince you with the revised poem and the rest of the chapter. I don't think I can save Leesie's hair, though.

    Thanks, Bee. Good to hear from you.

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  8. Someone in TX is crying and screaming at this moment: No!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I think if her hair was really short it will be sad but OK. For me as a reader is too much. Because what I think is like she had a problem with her hands not that she is sick and loosing her hair. Even more when the stylist give her a suggestion. Let read the rest so I can cry or get convinced /haha/.

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  9. Sounds like I've got my work cut out for me. Talk about pressure!

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  10. Angela: I LOVE YOU!!!! Remember that I'm a crazy reader ;)

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  11. Such a great poem! I absolutely loved it! I can't explain why, because I don't know myself, but I think that whole situation is just perfect!

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